The feedback I received was very useful. It gave me a lot of great ideas for how to improve my essay. I agree with them that I did more of telling than showing, but I think their suggestions will help me with how to show instead when I do my final draft.
I also think I need to add more pathos and figure out how to incorporate all of the senses for the reader to experience.
I also have good ideas how to add outside information into my essay. This will allow my audience to better relate to my essay. However, I think I'm going to have to play with it a little bit and see which ideas will work best.
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