Writing Log 5

Just as I did in my last paper I left a lot of my opinion out. After Dean and Deleney pointed this out I realized that the best way to improve my paper would be to actually have more personal insight. I feel like I sort of rambled about more of what other people thought and facts about the history of interracial dating. I think in my final draft I am going to make a lot of changes and maybe switch up the order how I have things and open with a more personal veiw on the issue rather than factual statements. I also feel like my paper was unorganized but this could be because my thoughts were unorganized. I might try writing things down and sorting them out just to get a better idea of how to lay things out. My first draft will serve as a guide for me to do this. I also need to find a source that will qualify for the scholarly journal or acedemic book.